August 6, 2006
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August Heat
**This poem is my first attempt at a Japanese Tanka.Heat falls upon me,
In what feels like a desert,
Without any shores.
I concede to this fire,
There’s no fighting anymore.
| Heat falls upon me, In what feels like a desert, Without any shores. I concede to this fire, There’s no fighting anymore. |
Comments (33)
it sure it hot
thanks for dropping by cutie
“is” not it LOL : biggrin :
awww…nice writing indeed: laugh :It is hot here in Hong Kong too: tongue :Have a wonderful day Pete…
A nicely-put surrender to summer heat.
I like the similes/metaphors.
I don’t believe I’ve heard of the Japanese Tanka before now
I like all types of poetry. Very nice.
Nice poem. Are you taking a poetry class, or do you just pick up books about it at the library? When I was young, I wrote poetry and lots of stories. My mom got tired of buying me new notebooks.
It’s not like they were that expensive. It’s funny to go back and read them now.
RYC: It was weird being in the minority, but a more ineresting experience was attending a Pentecostal church for a couple months. It really challenged be to look at ideas on speaking in tongues and people having the gift of prophecy. I think both can be exaggerated and not used properly, according to scripture. But, as with many things, each denomination has it’s own take on what certain scriptures mean.
Nice work.
Hope all is well in your world…
i really like it.
dry rain…….is there such a thing…….i long for cold sweats these days
Sorry, exhausted by the heat…………who is this? why am I here? oh yeah, ur a great guy!
but that’s not nice…:( See my dilemma? I never was good at the whole girly thing of not picking up when they call and saying “let’s be friends”. I don’t like confrontation. Maybe I should just beat him up or something. That I know how to do.
you’re a great commenter. thanks!
it’s alright. let’s talk/hang out soon. i need to get that gift to you.
RYC: So, do you think divorce and abortions should be made illegal? If so, do you believe we will ever pass laws to make that so? I’m just curious. While I don’t believe in either of these (although adultry is an allowance for divorce), I sometimes wonder if Christians help their cause by continually beating these issues into the ground. I suppose any small change in the law is one step closer to being in God’s will.
ryc: Sounds like it’s gonna be a busy 2 weeks. I’m doing well, thanks. Talk to you later. –Tiffany
Tanka accomplished perfectly! Great poem!
The heat also beats down here, feels like i’m carrying the sun in my bookbag! Oh I love the sun on my back
Nice job on the Tanka, Pete! You are so creative!
RYC: Thanks for the correction. I’m a dufus. Did you mean to say murder should be legal? I wasn’t sure if you were trying to be funny.
RYC: Just wanted to make sure you weren’t some crazy psycho…hee….hee : wink :
thanks
: wink : : cry :
wuz up buddy n/m here
yeah well you suck at it.. j/k I like it.
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nice. ya know what else would be nice? a little rain.
Good work, I think your turnign Japanese, lol. I remember studying poetry in school. There were some kinds I hated and some I did not mind.
Xanga adds Videos… and Pete hasn’t posted about it yet?!
j/k man.
it’s cold here these dayz.
kew
RYC: Thanks Pete. It is hard to tell if you are doing a good job parenting sometimes. At times it will look like you failed and other times you realize you did not. I am glad there are fun times like these because it isn’t always fun.
: unsure :Have a great fun weekend Pete…: rolleyes :
its nice in cool now 6 days later
This is about disgusting. Trash.